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Long ago , when I was young I often worked at an old inn  "The Winged Sword", I  worked there to earn some money so I could travel the world later. There were allways plenty of people, especially drunken people. I remember one evning in particular, it was a night with a storm like no other. It was impossible for me to go home that night, I was forced to sleep at "The Winged Sword" I prepared my bed beside the fireplace. I would be warm and cosy all night, but the weather would keep me awake. Just when  I was trying to tuck in,  the door flew up and an old lady came in. She seeked cover for the night, she gave the landlord three silvercoins before heading of to the old rockin-chair in front of the fireplace. Her eyes were as small as a mouses, she looked at me and smiled.

- Tell me boy, would you like to hear a story?
- If I ever! Are you really a storyteller? A real one??
- Oh... Well, we’ll see, now let me tell you the story about;

The Mermaid and her wish

Not long ago there lived a beautyful mermaid, she was the most beautyul creature that ever lived in "The Seven Seas". Many came to win her heart, but you see, she could not choose a partner. Because if she did, her beauty would disappear. A curse she that she unfortunately was born under.

Every night she seeked herself  to a certain cliff in her favourite bay. It is a very calm place where she could be alone in the night. Her golden hair sparks in the light of the moon. The stars twinkles and reflects themselfs in her eyes which is colored by the ocean. When she sits there all alone, combing her hair she sings a song for herself.
All mermaids and seacretures are very musical by nature. This mermids voice was as soft as a summersbreeze and just that breeze is taking her voice with it, wherever it goes. She sings to herself  to sleep and wakes up just before dawn, readyt to see what the ocean brings for the day. This is how it allways has been, but one night, something occured that would change her entire life...forever.

It started like every other nights while she thoughtfully sat in her own minds. Suddenly she heard someone singing with a very dark voice. The melody was happy and catchy, and it grew stronger and stronge as if it came closer. She listened very carefully to it, she was enchanted by it, after a little moment, she could see a human figure in the darkness, he on the other hand didn't notice her until he was up close. It is said that everything new and foreign can enchant you, yes our mermaid truly was capitated by the singin human. He baowed like a true gentlemen before he spoke his words.

- What a splendid evening for a nightly swim, young maiden.

In the dark, the man couldn't see the mermaids fens and scales, which mostly still was hidden in the water.

- What name do you carry, noble stranger? She asked carefully.
- What is a name? Without it’s carrier, it is nothing.
- You are right, noble stranger, but what shall I call you then?
- Ah, fair maiden, you have outsmarted me, and for that, you deserve a prize, I shall reveal to you, my name.

She smiled gently, this human was nothing like she had been told by.

- My name is Celio Bartal, Prince over "The Seven Green Hills" and Lord of "The Wild Forests"! But you can just call me Celio.

He smiled at her and his eyes almost shined in the dark night. He sat down on his heels and looked her straight into her big blue eyes.

- And you, fair maiden, what might your name be?
- My name is Naeco...and as you can see...I'm not a maid...

She smiled and splashed a little with her fen, the young man fell backwards down on the ground, taken by the surprise, but he soon recovered and wanted to know more about her.

Celio spent the whole night talking with his newfounded friend. He told her about the castle he lived in, the magnificent corridor that were filled of great paintings portraying mermaids, unicorns, faeries and other "mythical creatures". He told her about the marble floor and the columns that shined like mother-of-pearls. She was amazed of it all. Celio took out his flute and played a melody he had learned long ago. It was an old melody, from the ancient time, even Naeco recognized it. She couldn't take her eyes off of him. His eyes glimmered in the light of the moon that had come out, his hair flew in the wind, as if the wind itself was combing it. It was all a very magical athmosphere.

Naeco and Prince Celio had found each others hearts, they were in love, without even understand it by themselfs.
©2008-2010 *Linnzy
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Author's Comments

A beautyful mermaid, a young and handsome prince, their first meeting, can love overcome their different races?

First chapter.
Second chapter; [link]
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Category should be; Literature, Prose, Fiction, Fantasy/Romantic

According to my latest poll, people want me to upload the story chapter by chapter. So here the first chapter comes, it's kinda short though.
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If there is any mistakes in the writing please tell me, after a whle I'm geting blind on my own stuff. And even thogh I consider myself as pretty good at english, grammar isn't my best side.

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The picture is made by the very talanted :iconsecretmoon: if you havn't payed her a visit yet - please do!

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:iconshiezka:
very entertaining story :) I liked the beginning with the old lady telling the story

the picture is very lovely as well! :heart:

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:iconlinnzy:
Thank you very much, I'm glad you liked it! ^^

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:iconladymachan:
Yeah it's great but as you said some spelling mistake ( and this coming from me, the qqueen of miss spelling.) like evening, always ( tänk binder XD), bowed. BUT! I wanna disuss this story with you eye to eye. interesting. I makes me want to check on my story "Tempted by the night" ^^

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My real japanese name is :山下 Yamashita (under the mountain) 愛恵 Itoe (bless with love)
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:hug:

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:iconsaga86:
Jag gillar den jätte mycke :D skriv meeer!
:iconrainbowmermaid:
NIce Pic.

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Sólo por hoy, no me enojaré, no me preocuparé, daré las gracias, trabajaré honestamente y seré amable.
PRINCIPIOS REIKI
:iconlinnzy:
Thanks, but it's not mine, as I said in the description, the picture is made by :iconsecretmoon: pay her a visit, she is a really talanted artist!

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:iconsecretmoon:
Hej hej!!
Som du vet så e jag inte så aktiv här hehe XD men gud så bra att du har översatt den, jag har precis samma problem Engelska är ingen problem för mig men stavningen är mördande hehe jag är ty värre du är ju jätte bra =D
Så himla roligt att dom gillar storyn! själv gör jag de me ;D
Väntar på nästa!

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~*~Love is eternal~*~
:iconlinnzy:
Hej (och god jul)
Japp, jag lovade mig själv att göra det, och den är inte bara översatt utan även lite omarbetad, prinsen har fått ett nytt namn och jag är sååå glad att folk gillade den ^^ Snart kommer nästa del, hoppas innan nyår om jag får tid.

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